Wednesday, March 18, 2009

Winnie's special day

My character is Winnie comes from the movie The Many Adventures of Winnie the Pooh. Winnie is a lovely and smart bear whose greatest interest is eating honey, who always says: “The only reason for being a bee is to make honey. And the only reason for making honey is so I can eat it!”

Winnie’s special day
One day morning, Winnie got up as usual, and opened the window, “what a beautiful day! The sun is shine, birds are singing, and the wind is so comfortable.” Winnie said: “Except that I m a little bit hungry……” So Winnie tried to get some food for his breakfast. However, although he found the whole house, he can find nothing to eat, no matter his favorite honey.
Therefore, Winnie walked to the village and said to himself: “Maybe my brother Tiger or Piglet can give me some delicious food.” On the contrary, the village is especially quiet that day: the environment is no change, but he can see nobody! What’s happened? Winnie felt so amazed and asked loudly: “Isn’t there anybody here at all?” While nobody answered him.
Winnie felt extremely disappointed and lied on the land, suddenly; a piece of paper was going with the wind from the air and fell before Winnie; it’s a simple map with a sentence: “Do you want honey? Just follow the direction…..”
Winnie stared at the map for quite a long time and thought aloud, “Where does the map come from? Isn’t true? Or May be someone is making fun of me?” He felt so contradictory and said to himself: “What shall I do? The honey……en… so sweet, so delicious, so…I cannot endure the painful of losing it” Finally, he made up his mind that he should try his best effort to find his beloved honey.

2 comments:

  1. the story itself is pretty good, it defintely feels like a winnie the pooh story, uh i think the general story structure is pretty good too, but i think it would benefit from some better construction of the paragraphs. I think for instance the dialogue is a bit harder to read when it's embedded in the paragraphs like that so maybe some spacing would make it easier to read.

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  2. Yah..... i will try to make some improvements. Thank you very much for your suggestion.

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